Sunday, January 3, 2010

"Hands in hands.."

My eyes know you,
You are my friend,
To fight for me,
You will be always there, when,
Hand in hand ,
we walk together..

In the melancholy,
You kissed away my tears,
The darkness stepped back,
Cause we are linked together,
No one can keep as apart,
We live in each others heart,
Hand in hand...

Smile never fades,
They may call it useless,
My heart knows,
How much you worth for me.
Music starts here,
Melody stays near, when,
Hand in hand...

I am not afraid,
let them fly,
let them dry,
But we won't die, till,
Hand in hand,
we walk together..

Hand in hand..

23 comments:

Sunakshi said...

sweet :)

Nipun said...

That was really romantic..
awesome work..

Nuts

tristarfivestar said...

aww that was sooo great! LOVED IT!

Madhu said...

Thats really nice..keep writing more..:)

ambiguous_angel said...

ah..thats really sweet..
you're 16 and you can write that well..
i wonder where this feelings are coming from.

anyway, its a nice post:)

vidya said...

that was sweet:)

Oxymoron said...

i am sorry to repeat what everyone has said...but that was indeed very sweet....especially coming from a 16 year old....no matter how jealous maths gets or how mad physics and chemistry become do give writing a chance.... :D


happy new year!!!

WINDOWLAD said...

Wonderfully done with a delicate touch of love and innocence... great one!!!:)

Well, i still had a great new year although my mom was experiencing a li'l health problem.... i'm still positively thinking she'll be fine...!!!:) thanks for your concern...!!!:)

>Keep safe!!!:D

~Kelvin

Rohit Dassani said...

This one was truly amazing...hands in hands. Nice piece of work.

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

This one is highly romantic, sweet, hopeful and soulful. Nicely done.

I feel some restructuring to your poem can create a better punch. Detach "Hands in hands" from the stanzas - let the line (and anything that follows) come separate as I feel that it is much better off to keep them by themselves. It will then look like the lyrics for a wonderful song. :-)

But truly, you have done this one very nicely. It touched my heart.

An Ordinary Gal said...

sweet and nice :)

Sorcerer said...

romantic lines and fantastic!!

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Sunakhi di
thank you! ^_^

@ nipun
thanks! :))

@ Tristarfivestar
Thanks buddy! ^_^

@ Madhu
thankiyu :))

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Ambigous angel
Thank you! ^_^

@ Vidya
thanks! :))

@ Oxymoron
Hi!
welcome to my blog!
and thanks a tonn for dropping by!
'am glad that you liked it :)

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Windowlad
thanks buddy! :))
and you are most welcome! ;)

@Rohi
thankiyu! :))

@ Vittaldas Prahu
thanks! ^_^
Really happy that you liked phew!! ;)

@ Ordinary girl
Hi! welcome to my blog
'am really glad that you liked :))
Thanks a tonn!

@ Sorcy
thanks buddy!

Cursed♪♫ said...

ww...so sweet!! The picture goes so well with the post. :)
Keep writing!!
Check out my post!

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

hey..another awesome work~! so sweet..i wish i can also experience that sigh* *wishful* keep it up :3

funkyrave said...

hey!! hats off to miss creative.. u amaze! K m back.. and charged up..last exam is on 7th Jan.Then I am gonna be really free like a bird!
Cheerio :)
and thanks a lot!

funkyrave said...

hey! hats off miss creative.. u amaze me a lot! k last exam is on 7th then m free like a bird!
thanks a tonne!
Cheerio :)
god bless ya!

Sankoobaba said...

ekdum jhakaas!!

especially..

"Music starts here,
Melody stays near, when,
Hands in hands..."

really good..

keep it up..

and a bit late wishes..

happy new year..

may 2010 be year of smiles, fun , no tension, adventure, love and lots of chocolates!!!

Rishi said...

cute

The16YearOldNaive said...

this is cute :)

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Juhi
thanks dear! :)

@ ayu
Thank you! :)

@ Funkyrave
haha! Thank you! ^_^
'am happy that you are back!

@ Sankoo baba
thankiyu ^_^
Happy new year to you too! :))

@ Rishi
thanks! :))

@ Hailey
thank you! :))