Monday, November 23, 2009

"Love.."


Often while staring the sea,
I know you are somewhere in me..
Wishing for someone who's really dear,
Close to my heart and so near..
You are my love so sweet,
'twas destiny's wish for us to meet..
The twinkling stars giggling high,
When they found you in my eye..
You are in me and 'am in you,
We are amonst those few..
You woed me since long,
I realised, you are that song..
The way's waiting for us,
For those who are so dauntless..
Where flowers spreading smile,
Fireflies illuminating in the mean while..
Lets cross all those wall,
I am really not scared of that fall..
I know you would catch me,
Even if there's the death valley..

14 comments:

Rohit Dassani said...

hmmm... nice :P

Leo said...

nice one! :)
good rhyme!

Rahil said...

<3 <3

:)

soin said...

it would sound nice if there is no ryhme or meter scheme..just like randomness..free

vidya said...

hey...nice!

liked the 'twinkling stars giggling high' line:)

divsi said...

aww....a nice one...
:)hope u always think so sweetly bout luv:)

chocolate lover said...

@ Rohit
thanx :))

@ Leo
thank you :))

@ rahil
thanx :)

chocolate lover said...

@ Soin
okay next time i would try it :)

@ Vidya
thanx :))

@ Divsi
thank you.. and thats how I always think about love :))

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

it was so nice..i can really feel the ambiance of being in love from your poem..so great!^__^

chocolate lover said...

@ ayu
haha! thanx :))
you are really sweet..

HaRy!! said...

hmm that feeling!

tristarfivestar said...

your poem was such
that i couldn't believe that it was not written by a dutch :P
Loved the rhymes. use a little simile next time

tristarfivestar said...

metaphor and i love alliterations :)

chocolate lover said...

@ hary
:)) smiles!!

@ tristarfivestar
haha! it was written by me :P
thank you for your suggestion i'll work on it and thanks for liking my poem :))