Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Tears in my eyes

Tears in my eyes,
ache in my heart,
Yelling of my soul,
are veiled with,
a fake smile..
Shattered are my dreams,
Cursed one is my fate,
I wish if you could understand;
I wish if you could hold my hand..

16 comments:

Madhu said...

sad poemz make me sad..:(

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

very nice poem again CL..:3

i like the depiction of the emotion..short poem but captivating

( / ・ω・)//!!!
(P.S. if you'll reply to this comment..pls. put it in my blog's comment box so that i can update my comments :D)

freelancer said...

y the sad face dear??? cheer up

Samadrita said...

Melancholy and painful.Hey Chocy(I'd like to call you that :D) why so sad my dear?Write a happier one ne?
But nice write! :)

Sjmach said...

Y so sad?

☆Ths[Schrei]☆ said...

really nice! :) ^_^
I like the sadness thou (hope nothing hurts you by saying that! :D)

Nipun said...

M dere besides u..
dont wry.
Just keep writing choco...

Cheers

Nuts

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Madhu
sorry didn't want to make anyone sad :(

@ Ayu
Thank you! :))

@ Freelancer
just change of mood

@ Samadrita
Swinging mood :P
The problem is its hard for me to write a brighter one :P

@ Sandeep
swinging mood :P

@ Tharangni
thanks dear!

@ Nipun
thank you :))

Sunakshi said...

Its beautiful sister :)

welcome to twitter too ^_^

Chocolate Lover said...

@ SUNAKSHI DI
THANK YOU DI :))

wisewit said...

Yeah, it's kind of sad, makes me worry just a little about you, but, if you want to write a good poem, you have to write what you're really feeling. :) The way I see it a good poem is like a snapshot: it only shows a small piece of reality, but it's true to that piece.

wisewit

Chocolate Lover said...

@ wisewit
thank you! :))

WINDOWLAD said...

Hi CL,

Another short yet very captivating poem... well done!!!:)

Good day!!!:)

>Kelvin

Sankoobaba said...

a fake smile...and real tears...

apt contrast.

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Kelvin
thanks buddy :))

@ Sankoo baba
thank you :))

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

Why being so dark in poems fascinates you? I would also like to see a break-free option. It is OK, if you cannot break free, but there should be that escape route that is so eludes the escaper! Try it out next time for a better punch. :-)