Thursday, February 11, 2010

"No one"

No one sees the,
Beauty of her soul and
Innocence in her dark eyes.
No one hears,
her screaming and
her cry.
No one cares to,
wipe up her tears and
to console her.
No one can ever give,
her the pleasures of life and
a reason to smile.
She walks all alone;
'Cause she knows,
that's what is in her fate..



21 comments:

karan a said...

Deep meaning... is she suffering from something or is she shunned by the world because of her appearance or, did I get it wrong!

Selenium said...

Ah...
The girl/lady you refer to in this poem... She's not the only one to feel like that in this present world.

vidya said...

nice one:)

Sjmach said...

But she should know that there are people who feel the same way as she does!

An Ordinary Gal said...

you know what ? I always thought the same when i was in school...same feelings...i can relate with each and every line. you have written it very nicely :)

The Amateur Poet said...

Shriti, are you sure you are 16? This seemed so deep for a gal so young! It's real beautiful wordplay dear. Fantastic write-up! :)

ambiguous_angel said...

sad one.

but beautiful indeed.

Tripat "Prerna" said...

i m touched deep inside

Sunakshi said...

Loved it :)

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

aww..the girl in the poem shouldn't think that way~!! totally sad one :(

( / ・ω・)//!!!
(P.S. if you'll reply to this comment..pls. put it in my blog's comment box so that i can update my comments :D)

WINDOWLAD said...

Hi CL,

O, that was so 'emo'... words are really sad as if she's betrayed and rejected for so many times... i think you're really good at sad poems... great job!!!:D

Hey, Happy Valentine's day in advance!!!:)

Good day!!!:)

Keep safe!!!:)

>kelvin

Pria said...

:)

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Karan
Yes,you got it right! :)
Thanks! :))

@ Selenium
Thankiyu! :))

@ VIdya
thanks! :))

@ Sandeep
hmmm.. true!:)

@ Riya
awwww... thanks! :))

@ Leo
LOL yes 'am sure!
Thanks a million :))

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Angel
Thank you! :))

@ Prerna
thank you! :))

@ Sunakshi di
thank you :))

@ Ayu
thank you ayu! :))

@ Kelvin
thanks buddy :))
and Happy valentine day to you too :)

@ Pria
:))

Sankoobaba said...

she maybe alone..
but no you..
we all bloggers are with u..

he he.. nice poem...

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Sankoo baba
thankiyu! :))

ABHISHEK SiM said...

i m literally shocked!

Leo just said it for me.

ABHISHEK SiM said...

and yes, just curious: do you watch animes - i mean too many of them?

Chocolate Lover said...

Abhishek
Haha! thank you! :))

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Abhishek
No I don't! :P :D
I know you won't believe but seriously I don't! :D

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

Simply amazing. You are getting better and better with time and effort. I like this piece very much. Keep writing.