"life's gona be the same..."good one...
oki i have a plan..i will send you one of my pics..can you write a poen on that too??pleeassee
oh wow that was sooo short yet so meaningful........... wow you could write poems on anything....lucky!
short n dark this one was...good..i liked :)
nice usage of words in this poem. Just one change you could make is 'ruined heart never cries' or ruined heart doesnt cry' - cos a lil grammer mistake in there..But you are writing better day after day..thats great!Thankyou for the award, its my first one, made me very happy!Wish you a very happy 2010 in advance, where you pass all your exams in flying colours! cya
wow..another awesome piece choco XD haha..though I notice you always write sad or a lil emotional poems..are you upset or sad or something..? >.< kinda worried :3anyway..thanks again for the award you have given me..its my first award :D
what is wrong with ya sweets?why sad note?apart from that,really good xD o.O
@ Sankoobabathank you! ^_^@ Sulagna diNever tried? but still i would@ Tristarfvestarthanks but Can I? O_o@ Madsthankies! ^_^
@ VidyaThank you :)and welcome and same to u LOL :P@ Ayu hmm.. I am worried too!I don't know why do I write such poems!@ Sunakshi diNothing happened :)I am fine :D
Hey there,A quick suggestion: Fear grew in dark - this line is sort of weakening the punch. I see that the poem is of a battered and bleeding heart. Such a heart has already faced the fear and there can be no more fear.Just my take. Other than that I found the lines very strong and brings out the feelings of a broken heart very nicely. Truly touching.
Your poems describe my life as well.Its nice to know im not alone on feeling this way but i think death is the cure for it!My advice is fallow my footsteps and kill yo self
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