Tuesday, December 29, 2009

"Break my heart"

Break my heart,
Name it an art,
Make me cry,
Leave me alone,
Stay apart,

Break my heart,
Name it an art,
Take my life,
Whack me out,

Break my heart,
Name it an art..
I don't wanna live anymore,
Cause you don't trust,
Cause you don't love,
Cause you pretend

Break my heart,
Life's terrible,
Something is missin',
May that's you,

Break My heart
Name it an art
I promise
I won't say a word
Break My heart


AJai said...

hey cheer up. it is the new year after all. hope this poem is not reflective of your state of mind.

the poem itself is nice. dark and gloomy. if that was intended then maybe there could have been a bit more.

sulagna said...

ahhh some of us are those silent weepers you know...people knock the breath out of us,hurt us and walkover us but we would just sit in a corner and weep..agghhhhh!!!

Sorcerer said...

Cheer up!!!
its a cruel art..you see..

tristarfivestar said...

i liked it.............
i would seriously love it if it was a song!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please be sad more often :P
( hopefully you werent in a bad mood when you wrote that!!)

tristarfivestar said...

oh one i dont think so that shes sad. i guess she takes the emotion what lies in the picture... feels it.. try to find a story behind it (i guess) and publish it as a poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1111

Sunakshi said...

Um hope its just a fiction! :)

shravan said...

:) break my heart and call it an art.. :) nice line.. as tsfs said, tune it as a song :D

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Ajai
thanx and happy new year in advance :)

@ Sulagna di
TRUE soooooo True!

@ Sorcerer
yeah! :))

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Tristarfivestar
Be sad ..huh how cruel!!
Well actually I was in a sad mood ;)
thanks buddy :)

@ Sunakshi di
yeah it was!

@ Shravan
thank you! :)

Aarini said...

Bits of Me...which would never be same again...but I have formed myself..in a new shape...A part of me has died..but who cares..coz this is an art..

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♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

aww..so heat-breaking poem..i love it..T_T i almost cried..really really good..especially the repetition:
Break my heart,
Name it an art,

what a tear-jerker..>_<, so nice

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

btw..who's that anonymous..? what's his/her problem? i think his/her problem doesn't concern your post..haha..speaking of sudden outburst!!!>v<

Phoenix said...

hey its holidays now let the blues fade away with the retreating year...and welcome the new year will smiles and good cheer

come girl! it cant be that tough.. *smile* and the world will smile with you.. :)

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

Your poems seem to be always blue to me.

Do not know what is it that makes you write such painful poems...

I find few mistakes again Shree..do check..

I liked this poem and my fav lines, if i get to pick up are:

I promise
I won't say a word
Break My heart

They just say everything :)


Chocolate Lover said...

@ Aarini

@ Ayu
thank you! ^_^
and about the anonymous I don't know!!
I guess he/she is just a spammer nothing else :P

@ Phoenix

@ Mahesh bhaiya
umm.. If you don't mind can you tell me about my mistakes!!
I couldnot find them!

Anonymous said...

lovely Shriti... cheer up, it is the New Year.. Happy New Year :)

ur words are very strong! keep writing!

u r tagged at my blog! :) it might be a bit behind in pages.. its called "the lucky chinese tag". see in archive on sidebar :)

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Leo
thank you! ^_^

Cursed♪♫ said...

Cheer up baby!!
It's New Year!!!
Leave these thoughts :)
I did the same. It helps.
SO, SMILE!! And party.
Happy New Year.
Check out my post. You're gonna like it :)
Take care!

Chocolate Lover said...

@ juhi
thanks dear! :)


Wonderfully worded... i find it touching in a sad way... Cheers!!!:)


Chocolate Lover said...

@ windowlad
thanks! :))

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

Wow! I am blown away. Terrific.

Just one thing (I need to be a party-pooper every time! Sorry about that). Whack me out - is not a line that makes justice to the poem. Please replace whack with something else. Whack is like a slang.

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Vittaldas
No its not at all a problem
as I said you really help me to overcome my mistakes and learn. ^_^

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It was certainly interesting for me to read the article. Thanks for it. I like such themes and everything that is connected to this matter. I would like to read a bit more soon.

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