Awww..sho shweet xD
Nice one. A person devoted to loving the one he sees so depressed. Madly in love, I can see.But, if you don't mind I would like to offer a few suggestions. Few words that you use are sometimes inappropriate in the context. For example, reackless --> you probably meant reckless. But look up what reckless means and try to figure if it fits the context. Also, there is a typo. The last word, alot --> you meant a lot.Do take care of these because they will take away the credit from your poems. I hope you don't mind me offering these suggestions. It's all your call.Cheers!
@ SUNAKSHI DIThanks :)@ Vittaldas prabhuReally sorry.. it was my fault :(I Had done a few spelling mistakes
that was sweet..:)its an awesome feeling to be in caring hands
Good one...but i'd advise to work a bit more on this one... few more verses ... u know to elaborate the incident....warning: I'm not an expert at these so my word is as good as nothing.
very well written
"He grew reckless,When she was hurt."I think it is perfect...it happens...when you see someone you love hurt...not only do you try to relive their pain..but some do try to feel the pain they feel..so the reason for being reckless is the same....to feel pain..because she being hurt...we cant be really happy...right?
wow! so sweet! i wish i'll met someone like that too!!!!!^__^
@ sorceythanks! :)@ Rishithank you.. i'll work on it ^_^@ Pulkit thankiyu ^_^@ sankoo babayup ^_^@ ayu'am wishing the same!! :p
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