Friday, May 14, 2010

"..alone yet not so alone.."

dreams and nightmares,
are all same here..
Tears and smiles,
forever near..
A confused soul,
and an impregnible heart..
Truth and lie,
and a deep sigh..
regrettings no more,
let this love galore..
Don't hide your pains,
let the fireflies guide your way..
the wind whispers,
"leave this despair and lets share,
these feelings inside you ain't just yours..
..Now you are not alone anymore.."

15 comments:

Jingle said...

what a ride,
you did an amazing job,
it sounds music,
although that is sad....

Happy Friday!

Lincoln said...

i hope ur confusion got over after writing this...

island of peace said...

simply fantastic. so full of beauty.

Sankoobaba said...

yes..u r not alone anymore

NEEYA ............ said...

You'll surely Get rid of ur confusions...as u
Live in the world of poetry!
Beautiful poem presented with a musicality...

CutePriya said...

Beautiful...:)

AJai said...

Good stuff. :)

nitwit said...

damm lil devil u have done it again, a another post with so honest and intense feelings.......... lovely post

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

nice poem..really love it..continue making poems ^_^ you rock \m/

(p.s. check out my latest post if you have time,,.thanks :3)

An Ordinary Gal said...

awesome...loved the last 3 lines so much :)

WINDOWLAD said...

Oh, a hope in hopelessness... great writing on that!!!:)

Wish you're fine!!!:)

Blessings!!!:)

>Kelvin

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

I am able to feel the anguish. That's all I can say.

If I may suggest something, "use" the poetic license to good effect. Don't abuse it. It is really not necessary for your lines to rhyme. Look for effect not glamor. Just my two cents. But like I said, this poem has potential as I felt the anguish.

♥ Chocolate Lover ♥ said...

@ Vittaldas
ummm.. did I write anything wrong? :\
I am not a poet or anything..I just write what I feel..sometimes..they are mixed feelings..and still I dont call it poems..they are just my feelings..and you all named it poems!
I'm so sorry..
if i did anything wrong..I didn't mean it :((

Jingle said...

http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/05/18/awards-from-wordwand-trisha-and-more/

one poetry award,
8 others on bottom,
enjoy some if you wish to!
Happy Tuesday!

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

I deem you as a poet. You have the potential. Your poems generally have a good flow. You may not call it poems, but they eventually become that. :-) You have not anything wrong, dear. What I am saying is look for effect. Don't try to rhyme your lines. It is really not that necessary. Don't worry, with time you will become a great poet. I am sure! :-)