Thursday, August 19, 2010

"..but you lied.."

Days and nights are lost in illusion,
Time  wasn't enough when we were together,
dreams lost their worth;
Tired eyes started to shed tears
And those tears glittered in darkness..

Life seemed hard but you made it easier,
Stars leaned down and pale moon giggled;
With a hope of being together I survived everyday.
"Just one more chance" is all I wished all the time,
I didn't want to miss a single bit of my perfect rhyme..

Every step together that we had,
The world seemed like a better place.
I felt safe as you looked into my eyes
And thereby all my sorrows died.
It was the perfect routine that no one ever had..

It was like letting the music guide our way,
And watching the fireflies dancing to the song we sang beside the bay.
But I never knew, You never felt
The way I did..

P.S. ummm I don't know if it's good or not.. Its been quite long.. since I wrote my last poem =/ so do tell me.. :)


Selenium said...

Give a feeling as if the author is writing about her illusion rather than an actual occurrence. I mean, there is no one really but think that there is someone walking and singing alongside.

Or maybe not :-|

Anoop said...

Don't forget 'am only 16 so do not spam or use abusive words. It really hurts.
tat was funny.. :P whoz gonna abuse u here?? :O

n ur post was nice.. n the songs u r listenin r also nice... :D i got shocked when my speakers shouted when i opened ur blog.. :D

Rajlakshmi said...

the ending is very touching ...
imagery well created...

ambiguous_angel said...

i think its still as nice as what you've written before:)

Sankoobaba said...

"But I never knew, You never felt. The way I did"

great stuff...good poem

sulagna ™ said...

welcome back my muffin :)

Madhu said...

this one is really good re...i fel like singing it