Saturday, April 24, 2010

"..forbidden love.."

My eyes sinking in tears,
The feeling of coziness and no fears,
Yes I do cry but
Really I don't know why?

Your smile is bliss.
Your care is love.
that luminous expression
and warm admiration..

from that shooting star,
I just wish..
to fall in illusion where,
it's just you and me
forever..

Embracing me in you,
Why's this feeling so deep and new?
My woes are healed..
when you are with me

Listen to those faint echoes,
the delicacy of my heart,
and decent lies in my eyes
accept you no one knows..

Hiding all your fears and tears,
You are always there by my side..
I can't make you smile,
I can't share your pains,
How to tell you that
How much I love and how much I care..

50 comments:

vidya said...

Beautifully written! Loved this poem..

DuDo said...

Its a gr8 flow of words there specially when you as a rhetorical question "Embracing me in you,
Why's this feeling so deep and new?"

Really Chocolaty!!!!

Chhaya said...

sad and romantic at the same time... beautifully written :)

..pAnKHuRi.. said...

Time shall tell! :)

Do wait and do express :)

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

awww..so romantic yet sad poem..:) very nice :3


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Sankoobaba said...

...your poems really do play on the strings if emotions.. really powerful too...

"I can't make you smile,I can't share your pains"

sweet!!

how do you do it?

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Vidya
thanks x))

@ Dudo
thanks! xD

@ Chhaya
thanx!
I'm glad xD

@ Pankhuri
hehe! thanks! xD

@ Ayu
thanks xD

nitwit said...

lovely poem by a lovely girllllll . you are complaete wordsmoth kido

karan a said...

Again a beautiful creation!

In btwn, I have sent a request on FB!

Americanising Desi said...

you write beautifully

nitwit said...

hey i had sent request to a shri check out whather its you or not and my name is garima bajpai

suruchi said...

Niceeeeeeeee hain Choco...
Mush suits you more than sorrow:-)

Gauri Mathur said...

:):)

An Ordinary Gal said...

romantic choco...i loved reading it :)

adreamygal said...

Sadly beautiful !!! I can tbeliev u r jus 16 , coz the emotons have put out so wonderfully !! Its really good :)

Nipun said...

Amazed..
Beautiful choco...
Really lovely work..

Cheers

Nuts

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

So much yearning in those silent prayers. A very tender poem. I like it.

Madhu said...

AWWWWWWWWWWW

Sorcerer said...

nice nice...
its sad and at the same time...vibrant with the emotions.

ambiguous_angel said...

beautiful.

♫♪♥W!nK♥♪♫ said...

Hey!!
How have you been? Sorry I was away for so many days and so I couldn't get on your space!
Beautiful poem, as usual :)
Take Care!!

Jingle said...

beautifully written!

Wordwand said...

a lovely poem, well delivered emotions with a nice use of words.well done

Brian Miller said...

wonderfully written piece...great flow and intense emotion...

Leslie said...

Very young love"ish"
Like the beginning of spring
Lovely

Moondustwriter.com

Rishi said...

nice.. njoyed it

:)

http://theparanormalguy.blogspot.com/

hopepoh said...

a beautiful love poem.. i love it! :D you can really feel the emotions :)

Sh@KiR@ CK said...

Very romantic indeed.
Why the sadness, dear?
Happy Thursday!
Mine is here
hugs
shakira

♥ Chocolate Lover ♥ said...

@ nitwit
hehe! thank you so much! you are really sweet :))

@ Karan
haha! thanks! and added you :D

@ Americanising desi
haha! thanks x))

@ nitwit
added :D

@ Suruchi
hehehe!
thankiyu ^_^

@ Gauri
:))

@ Riya
haha! thanks! x))

@ a dreamy girl
haha! thanks! ^__^

@ Nipun
thanks! haha! ^_^

@ Vittaldas
Thank you :))

@ Madhu
^_^ thanks!

♥ Chocolate Lover ♥ said...

@ sorcy
thankiyu!

@ angel
thanks! ^_^

@ Juhi
hi juhi! I'm good and u?
thanks! I'm glad that you liked it :D

@ Jingle
thanks! :))

@ Wordwand
thank you! ^_^
thanks for dropping! :))

@ Brian
thanks! :))
good to see you! keep visiting :D

@ Leslie
thanks! I'm so happy!
keep visiting :D

@ Rishi
thanks! ^_^

@ hopepeh
hehe! thanks! glad to know that! ^_^
keep visiting :D

@ Shakira
haha! thanks! :))
I write sad ones mostly :P
you would more sad poems here :D
keep visiting ;)

Jingle said...

Happy Thursday,
have fun visiting your visitors back!

Ediomo said...

This is awesome...forbidden love...reading it over 3 times can't even do, I simply love it.

Check this out:

http://ediomoudofia.blogspot.com/2010/04/gratitude-amidst-agony.html

Niraj said...

A very sweet poem...touched my heart..Keep going

Regards
Niraj
Masallalemonade.blogspot.com

RepublicOfChic said...

Aw.. This poem is adorable! :)

Tara Miller Writes said...

Absolutely wonderful blog you have here! Beautiful imagery, background and especially beautiful words. I find myself wanting to say, "well writen for a young girl". But I remember all too well those words being said to me and I HATED IT! Because age does not determine how well one should do ANYTHING! Keep it up. I am excited to read more.

Jingle said...

I placed your link in,
what you do is to visit and comment for 12 blogs that are NEW to you from my list...
please pick new ones...
thank you.
have fun!

petemarshall1 said...

beautiful, wonderful poetry..well done

Vintage Obsession said...

well written and you do have your way with the words :-) i likes you blog :)

Vintage Obsession said...

well written and you do have your way with the words :-) i likes you blog :)

Adam said...

This poem is full of emotion and well written. Thanks

The Night Writer said...

You capture the aspect of love when you care for someone deeply but it is just not enough to heal them perfectly!

DuDo said...

Hey Choco

Finally i created an award page. and u hav been tagged there.
Here is an award 4 u to grab on!!!!

http://dudoism.blogspot.com/p/mind-blowing-award.html

THE BEATY said...

nice job on this one

THE BEATY said...

nice job on this one

viddhi said...

beautifull it is .. n ur just 16 now ...that is amazingly good for a 16 yr old ....

ithoughtitup said...

What a sweet emotional poem. Thanks for visiting my blog.

divsi said...

sooo cute n beautifully expressed!!1 feels great to be back to ya blog afta ages!!!:))

was away frm bloggin for a looong tym!!
glad to reconnect with you!:)

suryagni said...

simply gorgeous.

wonderfull and full of love.

Jingle said...

Thanks for sharing this with potluck poetry.
well done!

kavisionz said...

AWw..this was so lovely!! Love sure is bliss!
Beautifully expressed here, my friend..
Thanks for sharing this sweet and tender poem with poetry potluck! It really was a pleasure reading it!