Thursday, March 11, 2010

"Fences.."

The war makers has no clue about,
The whimpering in our soul,
over a letter that states,
Wife's confinement,
mother's illness.
On the other side,
The impregnible fences,
Our counterparts and threats,
The same whimperings and pain,
Our  fingers  bleed  to  think  of,
Being caress; without touching,
the spikes of woven fences.
They are the enemies,
of our country.
For those millions,
We are the ray of hope,
Who fights to bring satisfaction.


P.S. I am really bored :(
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19 comments:

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

its nice to see a new poem theme of yours..it was indeed a pleasure to read..^_^

Chocolate Lover said...

thank you ayu!
glad you liked it :))

Nipun said...

Very gud choco!!
U are doing a good job.
A msg given to ppl...:)

Cheers

Nuts

Selenium said...

Reminds me of The Hurt Locker... dunno why...

But as I've seen recently girls have a more effective imagery of the negative side of war :D

vidya said...

New arena you have ventured into with this poem and its a good attempt..keep writing!

WINDOWLAD said...

Dear CL,

I came here to apologize... i have lost your comment on my recent poem... but it wasn't my intention... i was actually surprised... i'm 100% sure that i have published all the comments to be moderated but when i viewed my blog it was not there and remained nothing... but it appears on my "recent comments widget" located at the sidebar of page... i really don't know what to do 'bout this matter... i just hope that you'll understand my case... i'm really sorry for that!!!:( but i've read your comments and i really appreciate it... thank you so much!!!:)

Good day!!!:)

>Kelvin

Madhu said...

u seem to get good at this...:)

Rinkal said...

nice poem:)

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

"The spikes of woven fences. They are the enemies" -- This for me are the best lines in this beautiful poem. Keep writing!

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Nipun
thank you! :)

@ Selenium
hmmmmmm

@ Vidya
thankiyu :)

@ Madhu
thanks! :))

@ Kelvin
hey buddy!
it's okay! It happens!!! ;)
Last it had happpened with me too :P
I would love to comment again! ;)

@ Rinkal
thanks! :))

@ Vittaldas
thankiyu!

WINDOWLAD said...

Dear CL,

Thank you for understanding!!!:) You're such a nice friend to me... it's really weird why such things happen... until now, i can't figure out where those lost comments are... now i'm bit afraid to set my comment form into moderation... anyhow, i should forget 'bout it... hmmn, yeah... it's true... this poem is somethin' new... and somethin' to praise for... i think you really did a great job here!!!:D Cheers!!!:)

Good day!!!:)

Keep safe!!!:)

>kelvin...(^^,)...

Koo said...

That was nice! :)
Somehow, i don't get the point of wars..

Being Pramoda... said...

heyyyy sis....:)

wonderful formation and thughful.. thank you...:)missed youuu alott.. well..have nice time..:)

Chocolate Lover said...

@ Kelvin
o kelvin you dont have to say thanks coz you are my friend and anything for you buddy!
it was just an accident ;) Dont think much about those comments!
and am glad that you liked the poem :)

@ koo
hey koo! welcome to my blog!
keep visiting!
thank you! foe liking it! :)
and about the reason of war :P

@ Pramoda di
hi di! how are you?
missed you too!
glad you liked it :)

Sankoobaba said...

like the tomato sauce ad.
"Its Different!"

your poem is..different..
and very good too..

keep it up...

aritra the daydreamer said...

Nice poem....
Hey how is ur health??and how is ur prep for xams???

☆Tharangni☆ said...

hey.. loved the way the poem is... it's like a 'chocolate' right??^_^

impuregod said...

hey nicely put... good composition.....

suruchi said...

Hey Choco...
Wow...beautiful expressions in words so few...
Wish u could train me in doing so...:-(
It makes so much sense that now I am beginning to wonder of you are just a little girl...and well since you are...
Lemme just say
You are a wise and choco sweet little girl..who makes amazing sense:-)