Friday, May 14, 2010

"..alone yet not so alone.."

dreams and nightmares,
are all same here..
Tears and smiles,
forever near..
A confused soul,
and an impregnible heart..
Truth and lie,
and a deep sigh..
regrettings no more,
let this love galore..
Don't hide your pains,
let the fireflies guide your way..
the wind whispers,
"leave this despair and lets share,
these feelings inside you ain't just yours..
..Now you are not alone anymore.."

13 comments:

Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall said...

what a ride,
you did an amazing job,
it sounds music,
although that is sad....

Happy Friday!

Mr Happy said...

i hope ur confusion got over after writing this...

island of peace said...

simply fantastic. so full of beauty.

sanket kambli said...

yes..u r not alone anymore

Anonymous said...

You'll surely Get rid of ur confusions...as u
Live in the world of poetry!
Beautiful poem presented with a musicality...

CutePriya said...

Beautiful...:)

Ajai said...

Good stuff. :)

nitwit said...

damm lil devil u have done it again, a another post with so honest and intense feelings.......... lovely post

Ordinary Gal said...

awesome...loved the last 3 lines so much :)

kelvin s.m. said...

Oh, a hope in hopelessness... great writing on that!!!:)

Wish you're fine!!!:)

Blessings!!!:)

>Kelvin

itsyvitsy said...

I am able to feel the anguish. That's all I can say.

If I may suggest something, "use" the poetic license to good effect. Don't abuse it. It is really not necessary for your lines to rhyme. Look for effect not glamor. Just my two cents. But like I said, this poem has potential as I felt the anguish.

Shriti said...

@ Vittaldas
ummm.. did I write anything wrong? :\
I am not a poet or anything..I just write what I feel..sometimes..they are mixed feelings..and still I dont call it poems..they are just my feelings..and you all named it poems!
I'm so sorry..
if i did anything wrong..I didn't mean it :((

itsyvitsy said...

I deem you as a poet. You have the potential. Your poems generally have a good flow. You may not call it poems, but they eventually become that. :-) You have not anything wrong, dear. What I am saying is look for effect. Don't try to rhyme your lines. It is really not that necessary. Don't worry, with time you will become a great poet. I am sure! :-)